i knew this project will be picked up sooner or later! can't wait for your news!!

this MS is important to MEEEEEE

THIS BOOK IS EVERYTHING

oh the dancing plague 👁️ you got my attention

make it more punchy. "The consequence creeps up on him" doesn't have that same impact.

I read your other pitches as well and I think you have such a good concept over all. This pitch stands out to me the most since it states clearly the inciting incident and the stake! I'd try to incorporate the language used in the other pitch ("his plan backfires") or something along the line to

Oh just the word counts

If you have WC, play around with it for clarification and to make stake not too vague. Overall I think this is very solid! Good luck!

This pitch stands out to me immediately and if i was an agent, I would be so intrigued to request! I love it when fantasy is about the normal people and so absurd it just WORKS. The pitch makes me wonder how being a woodland elf plays into this? What does the wake of the titan imply to this world?

Amazing pitch! I understand the pitch so clearly and that's solid work. If you have more WC, include how the teammate's death is tied to the painting or the conspiracy, so you don't have any loose ends!

to the world and to Ivigh if he fails?

This pitch is super intriguing, but more clarity would help it stand out! We know who Ivigh is, which is amazing, but what is the offer he can't refuse? Is the gaping, bloodless hole in his chest literal? What is the stake here? I assume it's that the dead are not left alone, but what does it imply

I'm a sucker for the little mystery twist in fantasy! This sounds amazing and you nailed the three questions in a pitch (mc, inciting incident, stake) so this is already very solid! I would clarify, if possible, what the cult would do if the mc fails to really raise the stake.

This sounds so fun and your voice shines through the pitch! Would be good to really nail how the royal child plays into the "total collapse of society." Putting some urgency in rescuing them will make the stake stand out.

Okay, yes! Definitely make that point clearer in the pitch, I think it will also leverage the stake and people will see immediately how dangerous that mission is without being told that it is dangerous.

I actually need to read this book! Omg! It's so good and all of your pitches are so strong. You have something very potential on your hands! Good luck!